REFINED SCRIPT

I have been rethinking my idea and script for  a while now. Rather than trying to convey the message through the abstract illustration which i pitched before, I am thinking more in terms of iconic, symbolic illustrations to get the message across.


I did like the old script which i had before but to jstify it to the iconic and symbolism which I am going for with the new illustraion of the concept I  would like to focus on someone who is failing over and over again because of the way he thinks. So my script will some what describes where he stands and how thinking about the unknown in a positive way will lead him to success. (full potential)


Heres flow (of words which i have for it):

Failure, 

Paralyzed, 

Ignorance, - is bliss, and the reality - Ignorance is paralysis.Lack of confidence, Doubt, Fear, -being trapped in this emotions almost as if prisoned. Unknown, - fear of the unknown, unable to surpass the fearCourage, Curiosity, Inspiration, - A choice for him to move on, Questions, - not understand the reality he is in right nowExcitement, Desire, Action, Adventure, - Playing and experiencing the world.
Experiences, Learning, Knowledge,

Practice, Improvement, leading him to reach the full potential and break free of who he was before Full potential.

So basically the unknown can be looked at in two ways, positively or negatively. The person whom i am addressing the message has been looking at it in a negative way and that is why we start from the negative side of the spectrum and help him move to the positive using the script.


I was trying a lot of different combinations and finally came up with this one with the help of one of my friends who is Studying corporate Psychology.


Knock, knock – the Unknown is here

Will you open?
/No. Ignorance is bliss./
Ignorance is paralysis
Soiled by fear and doubt, there is no way out 

This cramped confinement you are in
Imprisoned
Open the door
A question will lure you in
Back to a world of action
I promise, curiosity stirred the inspiration of many
the world is a playground for your adventure, sow your invention into its depth
and in time, full potential you will reapS
Success

Here is some of the process work for the script:

BELIEVING IN THE CONCEPT

Even though some of my professors did not see my concept as having a good potential for development, I did not give up on what i believed in. I was very confident with my concept statement and I see a great thesis animation using the concept. So I decided to not change the concept, but to try and find other ways of portraying the concept. Such as seeing the possibilities of illustrating it a different way. 

Before any of this could happen i wanted to try and fix my script for the concept. Since the script was a going back and forth. There were places where the script was carrying the action forward and then because of the choice of the words i had it sometimes went backwards. This process of figuring out the perfect flow of the script was one of the hardest things for me since I am not a great writer and I personally hate writing. 

This did not stop me from coming up with a better script, I tried getting help from my professors and also friends I had. They all were very supportive in helping me with the script.

This is what i have so far form the previous script which I wrote. 

We all have a fear
Fear creates a doubt
Doubt generates a fall
Fall gives raise to success
Success brings experience
Experience results in learning

Learning triggers a question 
Question leads to an adventure 

Adventure evokes excitement 
Excitement triggers curiosity
Curiosity provokes an action
Action fuels potential
Potential within.


This is sort of my visual representation of how potential and ignorance work. I developed this model with my professor Ed Cheetham:

THE OUTCOME

The illustration of my concept being very abstract, I wasn't expecting everyone to get it since I was in the middle of it. Personally i dont like when someone judges me in the middle of an uncompleted project. Because it is very hard to understand something so abstract in the middle of the process.

When I got the results of what the instructors thought of my concept I got an overall "No" for the grade. This didn't mean that I should not continue working on the concept, but rather that it needs a lot of refinement inorder to be accepted as a senior thesis. While some instructors actually took the time to go through the concept and constructively criticize it, couple of them just judged the piece on what they saw the first time. Which is understandable. Just like anyone else who is viewing the video for the first time, the insight from the professors were really helpful. At the same time, it was frustrating too since I was not done with refining the execution of the concept and the abstract elements needed much work before anyone could make any sense of it.

Basically I have a lot of refining to do. Especially because the whole piece is based on juxtaposing extreme sports motions/action on to an abstract environment which follows a narration of someone going from being ordinary to extraordinary.

PRESENTING TO THE FACULTY

We had our final presentation on Tuesday, where we presented to the whole faculty. The presentation included, the storyboards, concept statement, animatic and style frames. The presentation went really well. I thought I did a pretty good job in presenting a very abstract concept, which is very hard to communicate.

Here is the PDF of the presentation.

And here is the animatic.

A COMBINED CONCEPT

When both of the very unrelated concepts/ ideas are combined i got some very abstract and unexpected results. Results which I would have never been able to come up with before. It very abstract and sometimes even very difficult to understand. But I believe that this uncertainty in the images which I show to the audience would be my key to make something uniques and different. I can still achieve my end result of having people to feel what it is like to being in the middle of a multiple extreme sports triggering their emotion and potential.

Here is the storyboard and the animatic i made for it.

 And here is the story boards.